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Andreas

By the sea

At the summer holidays my friend and I drove to a sea. When we were there, it was 15 pm. So we went down the path.

Than we played Volleyball and I win. After that we played football in the sand and my friend win the football match.

My friend and I wanted to swim and than we go in the water. When we swam my friend Luke saw a snake at the beach and he scream. So we ran out of the water and I looked at the snake, because I like snakes, but my friend Luke didn’t like snakes. I saw the snake and I said my friend that this is not a dangerous snake. I took the snake and put it in the small forest next to the beach.

When we drove home I told this my mum, my dad and my brother and they were happy that I helped the snake to get in the forest. I think the snake was also happy.

Does it have clear paragraphs? Yes it have clear Paragraph.

What is the topic sentence in each paragraph? At the summer holidays my friend and I drove to a sea.

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