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Fiona

My day in London

On the morning at 9pm. I went to the Big Ben. I went the stairs up on the top I stand before the big clock it was greet. After that I had lunch at restaurant. The eating were yummy. I had eat a Steak with potatoes and sauce. And I drink many glasses water. The weather was great it was sunny and warm so I sit outside and eat my Steak. After the lunch I went to the London bright. The London bright was very big and when a ship came the bright fold to. And I go on the other side of the Themes. It was nice. Afternoons I had a picnic at a park.I had eat and apple and a cake it was yummy. I drink a cola and I enjoy the moment. The are twitter and it was quiet. After the picnic went to the Tower of London and to the London Eye.The Tower of London was very interesting. At the London Eye I had a very nice view. At the evening I go back to the hotel and it was a wonderful day.

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What is the topic sentence in each paragraph? 1.On the morning at 9pm.

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