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Timo

before: - Look at the task (What do you have to do) - Take notes (What do you already knnow? e.g keywords, facts, ...) - 5 "W"s (What? Who? Where? Why? When?, somethimes how? - Think of a structuree (title, beginning, main part/body, ending) while: - Use paragraphs! - Don´t write too fast (you will make less mistakes) - If you don´t know a word, (use a dictionary or) describe what you want you say - What is the right ? (past, present or future) - Use words to connet two or more sentences (and, or, but, also, while, then ...) - Don´t use (aren´t, isn´t, hasn´t, I´ve) exceptions: writing to a friend or speech - Use adjectives! (a beautiful girl, an interesting book, a big book) after - Read your text and look for MISTAKES - Check that you wrote down everything you want to write (Is my text complete)

play football with friends or with my teammates

Every Monday, Friday (and Saturday when I have a football match) I play football in a football club. I play in Kall at the Kaller SC. And today I play too. In the gym of Kall from 5 o´clock to 6 o´clock, but Friday I play from 5 o`clock to 18:30. Monday inside and Friday outside. I have 15 teammates. Often I have Saturday a match. Inside it´s a cup. Outside, its just a match. I play football, because it makes me fun. Sometimes I score. In my freetime in the summer, I play with friends too. My favorite posicion is the left midfield or the forward. Use more Words to connect.

Feedback from Daniela

I like your text because you have answer the Five W's. But you have no paragraphs.

make longer sentences ((Sometimes I score)a goal). You should use more connecting words.