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Lucas und Torben

A walk through a big city By Lucas Wollgarten

On my Holidays my family and I went through the city Frankfurt. The path through the city Frankfurt was 2 kilometre long. It was a long and pretty path through Frankfurt. We want to see the city Frankfurt, because we thought Frankfurt is a pretty city. Frankfurt was very big. At 12am, we started walking through the city Frankfurt The first part from our walk was brilliant, because we found interesting buildings and things. We walked for two hours past shops like Lacoste, Gucci or Vans and we walked also past great museums, beautiful churches, brilliant skyscrapers and we found interesting histories about Frankfurt. We have done this, because we thought it would be interesting, if we walked past shops and great buildings. At 2pm, we went to the Main tower The second part from our walk was also great, because the skyline was beautiful. We went for two hours on a skyscraper: The Main tower. The tower has fifty floors and is two hundred metre high. At the top from the Main tower you have a good view of the city and the river Main. You can see there the skyline. The skyline was very great. We often saw planes at the sky. We saw the Frankfurt airport too. The planes arrived there. I know something about the airport from Frankfurt. The airport is the fourth largest airport from Europe and the biggest airport from Germany. We went on a skyscraper, because we thought skyscrapers are very nice. At 4pm, we stayed at a restaurant. The third part of our walk was nice, because the food was delicious. We stayed for three hours at a restaurant. We ate a delicious food and drank special drinks. When we were finished, we payed for the food. Then we went outside the restaurant. At 7pm, we drove back to our hotel. The fourth part of our walk was amazing, because the evening was brilliant. When we reached our hotel, we want to watch an Action Film. We watched the film for two hours. When the film ended, we want to play a game. Then we were so tired and sleep in our bedrooms. But we all thought that the day was a great day!

Ex 3 Feedback from Torben Dear Lucas

Your text is very good because you have written a very good Red thread and your text is very in detail. Your verbs and adjectives are very good. You tell me very good from your story and negative is not.

By Torben Gerhards

A walk trough a big city

On my holidays I went with my family to London we still there for a week. We went on the first day to the London eye. The view was amazing. On the second day we arrived to the Big Ben and the tower bridge. This buildings were brilliant. The Buckingham palace was so big .There were so many rooms and floors. In London were so big restaurants with so delicious food. There were so many shops like Supreme, Gucci and other shops. They were so nice. We saw the Wembley stadium and we saw the match Manchester United vs. Chelsea FC. It was a great Match. It ends 3:2 for Manchester United. The Wembley stadium was great. It was so big. There were so many stadium seats. There were exactly 90.000 seats. The atmosphere were great . The food in the stadium was delicious too. Our hotel was beautiful too. I had a big bed and a TV on my Room. The food in the Hotel was not so good. At the end we arrived with the plane back.

Ex 3

Feedback from Lucas

Dear Torben, I find your content very good, because you have chose a good topic. But I want say negative points too. 1. You often didn't answer the Ws questions: When?, Why ? 2. You often didn't say all topic sentences.

Jona

A scary spending in the forest

by Jona Gossen class 7d

13.11.18

On our class trip in this year we camp in the Snowdon national park for two nights. We drove one hour, then we were there. A Ranger show us the way to the camping place in the forest.

When we arrived, we put up our tents and divide who has to do which job. Then we go out in the forest, and the Ranger show us many interesting things (different plants, animals and lots of information.

After our trip we made a fire and sit down around it. After sitting around the fire until late into the night, we should hang our backpacks and other things outside on the trees so that no animals can get into our tents. Then we all go into our tents.

In the middle of the night in all the tents you could hear a loud scream. It was so scary because it’s doesn't sound like a human. The teacher’s told us not leaves our tents. We all have fear and we all think that this is a dangerous animal which is hungry and scoff us.

Ten minutes later is turned out to be that Sarah have scream in her dream, and didn’t now, that she screams in real.

At the next morning we all were happy, that no one was in danger, and that everybody’s fine. The last two days of our trip went by without a break between cases.