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Lucas und Torben

A walk through a big city

By Lucas Wollgarten

On my Holidays my family and I went through the city Frankfurt. The path through the city Frankfurt was 2 kilometre long. It was a long and pretty path through Frankfurt. We want to see the city Frankfurt, because we thought Frankfurt is a pretty city. Frankfurt was very big. At 12am, we started walking through the city Frankfurt The first part from our walk was brilliant, because we found interesting buildings and things. We walked for two hours past shops like Lacoste, Gucci or Vans and we walked also past great museums, beautiful churches, brilliant skyscrapers and we found interesting histories about Frankfurt. We have done this, because we thought it would be interesting, if we walked past shops and great buildings. At 2pm, we went to the Main tower The second part from our walk was also great, because the skyline was beautiful. We went for two hours on a skyscraper: The Main tower. The tower has fifty floors and is two hundred metre high. At the top from the Main tower you have a good view of the city and the river Main. You can see there the skyline. The skyline was very great. We often saw planes at the sky. We saw the Frankfurt airport too. The planes arrived there. I know something about the airport from Frankfurt. The airport is the fourth largest airport from Europe and the biggest airport from Germany. We went on a skyscraper, because we thought skyscrapers are very nice. At 4pm, we stayed at a restaurant. The third part of our walk was nice, because the food was delicious. We stayed for three hours at a restaurant. We ate a delicious food and drank special drinks. When we were finished, we payed for the food. Then we went outside the restaurant. At 7pm, we drove back to our hotel. The fourth part of our walk was amazing, because the evening was brilliant. When we reached our hotel, we want to watch an Action Film. We watched the film for two hours. When the film ended, we want to play a game. Then we were so tired and sleep in our bedrooms. But we all thought that the day was a great day!

Ex 3 Feedback from Torben Dear Lucas

Your text is very good because you have written a very good Red thread and your text is very in detail. Your verbs and adjectives are very good. You tell me very good from your story and negative is not.

By Torben Gerhards

A walk trough a big city

On my holidays I went with my family to London we still there for a week. We went on the first day to the London eye. The view was amazing. On the second day we arrived to the Big Ben and the tower bridge. This buildings were brilliant. The Buckingham palace was so big .There were so many rooms and floors. In London were so big restaurants with so delicious food. There were so many shops like Supreme, Gucci and other shops. They were so nice. We saw the Wembley stadium and we saw the match Manchester United vs. Chelsea FC. It was a great Match. It ends 3:2 for Manchester United. The Wembley stadium was great. It was so big. There were so many stadium seats. There were exactly 90.000 seats. The atmosphere were great . The food in the stadium was delicious too. Our hotel was beautiful too. I had a big bed and a TV on my Room. The food in the Hotel was not so good. At the end we arrived with the plane back.

Ex 3

Feedback from Lucas

Dear Torben, I find your context very good, because you have chose a good topic. But I want say negative points too. 1. You often didn't answer the Ws questions: When?, Why ? 2. You often didn't say all topic sentences.

Jona

A scary spending in the forest

by Jona Gossen class 7d

13.11.18

On our class trip in this year we camp in the Snowdon national park for two nights. We drove one hour, then we were there. A Ranger show us the way to the camping place in the forest.

When we arrived, we put up our tents and divide who has to do which job. Then we go out in the forest, and the Ranger show us many interesting things (different plants, animals and lots of information.

After our trip we made a fire and sit down around it. After sitting around the fire until late into the night, we should hang our backpacks and other things outside on the trees so that no animals can get into our tents. Then we all go into our tents.

In the middle of the night in all the tents you could hear a loud scream. It was so scary because it’s doesn't sound like a human. The teacher’s told us not leaves our tents. We all have fear and we all think that this is a dangerous animal which is hungry and scoff us.

Ten minutes later is turned out to be that Sarah have scream in her dream, and didn’t now, that she screams in real.

At the next morning we all were happy, that no one was in danger, and that everybody’s fine. The last two days of our trip went by without a break between cases.

Alina L.:

A Classtrip to Ahrweiler

At the 13th September arrived the classes 6a,6b, 6c and my class the 6d to Ahrweiler.

On the first day at the hostel we had to make our bed and cleared our bags. Then we had lunch. At the afternoon we played table tennis or a game called werewolf. Later we went to a playground. At the Evening we had Dinner. Then we played games and went to bed.

On the next day we had breakfast and then we went to a museum. After the museum we made a “Stadtreli”. Later we were shopping in the city. At the evening we made a disco and sang along with the other students.

At the last day we had breakfast and then we pack our things. We went by bus to the Aktivi in Kall. But I went to the wedding of my aunt. The Wedding was very beautiful.

This was my classtrip to Ahrweiler.

Feedback from Mara to Alina:

positive:

Your text is very good and nice

- you have paragraphs in the text

- your text is understandable

negative:

The name is Stadtrallye or city rally

You're text is very nice, keep it up

Leni

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Holidays on a farm

My family and I are going to a farm in the mountains for a few days in October. We stayed in a cottage which was in a small village. Outside were huge meadows where sharp or cows stood. If you looked out you saw only meadow and huge mountains, on the tops was already snow.

One day we went hiking in the mountains. It was very nice but unfortunately also very cold. On the top of the mountain I built a snowman with my sister. Above you could look over the whole village.

The next morning my brother and I went across the meadows. We saw a lot of sheep and a small lake where the sun reflected on the water. The weather was very good, the sun was shining and only a few clouds were in the sky.

At the last day before we drove to a big city. Since we went shopping in a shopping center. At lunchtime, we went eat in a restaurant. Unfortunately, this holiday was already over but it was a very nice time with the family.

Emily´s feedback:

positive:

You have made good paragraphes.

Your text is understandable.

You answered four out of five "W" questions.

negative:

You don´t have a topic sentence in every paragraph.

You have taken the present into your first sentence but the rest of your text is in the simple past.

You don´t answered the question "why".

Tessa

On a trip to Frankfurt

I was with Elena and my parents in Frankfurt. We was stayed in a hotel. On the first day we was shopping in the morning. In the evening we was ate in a Pizzeria. On the next day we went into two zoo's the Frankfurter Zoo and the Opel Zoo. The Frankfurter Zoo was very small and there was 30 animals and at Luch time we walked around the compleat zoo. The Opel Zoo has renuvierungen and there are very little animals. The Zoo was small there was 10 or 20 animals. On the last day we went to home we was a bit sat that the Zoo's was so small. 😢

Julia: Your text is very cool and you have a lot of informations about the Zoo.

You wrote good and understandable sentences.

You wrote in simple past.

You use the W questions.

(Die Fetten Wörter sind falsch)

compleat= complete

renovierungen = renovations

luch = lunch

sat = sad

to home = home

Emily

My walk by the sea in Newquay in Cornwall

This summer my family and I went to England during the holidays. More specifically to Newquay which is in Cornwall.

Near our apartment was a really nice sea, with clear sand. We often went together along the sea, and at the end we ate at the Surfers bar.

This beach was more for surfers. In the evening many of them were there. The water was unfortunately too cold to swim. I felt the wind blowing in my hair and it was very cold. It suddenly came a high wave and I could not run away fast enough. And already I had my legs wet and sand in my shoes but it was still beautiful. After that we went to eat something and enjoyed the sunset.

We were all happy to have chosen this holiday as we just wanted to inquire about England and enjoy the landscape.

This was my beautiful trip by the sea in England.

Feedback Leni:

Positive: - You wrote good and understandable sentences.

- You wrote in simple past.

- I think it's good that you wrote the text alive.

- You usually answered the W questions.

Negative:

- I find some sentences very short and would write something else.

- I think it would be nice if you had written a little more what you did

Julia

We watched a film

We went on Tuesday to Euskirchen.

At first we went shopping and then we went to the cinema. We watched a new film.

The name of the movie is = Fantastic Beasts, The Crimes of Grindelwald.

I went there with my mum and my sister and it was so cool.

The movie was so exciting. We went there, because we want to have fun and we want to watch a movie in the cinema.

positiv:

You use the correct tense.

You use the W-questions

negativ:

You have very short sentences.

Liv

A trip to Mallorca

At the 13. August my family and I flew to Mallorca. We lived there a week in a house with a pool. Near by the beach.

On the first day, we went to the beach near the house and went swimming. Then we went to a restaurant and ate Pizza.

On the next days we stayed home and played in the pool, we went to another beach or we wandered to lots of beautiful places.

The last day we drove with the car to Palma and to the cathedral. In the evening we went to the airport and flew to home.

Mara

My last trip was to Italy. I was very excited, but that was my first holiday trip alone. My Friend was 2017 in Italy in the Camp, and she told with me about her last year and she helped me with my fear. We drived with the Bus 13 hours and then we are in Vada in Italy. It was so cool and I was happy that I’m there. I called my family every day and there was a pool or a supermarket after 12 days i’m at home and I was so happy that I saw my family. I missed they so much and I had very much stoff to tell it to my friends or my Family.

That was my Report about my trip with my friend I hope you like the Report

Bye Mara Born

Feedback Alina:

positive:

you have answered 4 of 5 W questions (where? who?...)

you're text is understandable

negative:

you have lots of spelling mistakes

you have no paragraphs

Nika

A day in New York City

On holidays I went to New York City for one day and I think New York Is the best City in the world first we arrived at JFK airport and take a taxi to our hotel and take a drink. One hour later, we take the metro (New York City’s underground) and went to Manhattan. We arrived at the Grand Central Station. It’s so big and old but already nice.

When we went out of the station there was skyscrapers everywhere you look and everything is so much bigger than in Germany. It was so fantastic. And at the next we went around the corner and there was the 5th avenue! Hollister, Zara, Michael Kors and much more. It’s a paradise for me.

After the shopping we took the metro again to downtown and go to a little park where you can see the sea. The sun was going down and there it was! The Statue Of Liberty. It is so crazy to see it ind real life.

Then we took the metro again and went to the Times Square. The sun was already went down and it’s was so powerful. Everywhere you look was people. And then we went to our hotel. And when I was lieing down on my bed I thought that it was the best day in my hole life!

Ben

A trip to Italy.

My Family and I was in the Holiday in Italy. we lived in a Caravan on the Camping place: Bella Italia. It was very cool because, there was a very nice Football field and a nice swimmimg pool. Every day I was on the Football field with lots of People. It was very hot but it was very cool too.

At 10 am to 12am was a Football competition. It was every day. I often win the Competition with my Team because, we was very good. I played every day from 10 am to 10 pm. Sometimes I was in the swimmimg pool because it was to hot for Play Football.

In the last week we went in the City and we go Shopping on the market. It was not so good because, it was boring. But I bought nice Things for me. It was a big market too.

Every day in the evening there was a very nice Disco for Kids. It was funny and interresting. And there was an funny theatre with very very funny adults.

I think that Italy is an very nice Country because,there are very expensive Things what you can do. I think on the next year, I certainly drive with my Family to Italy.