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Lena

A day in the winter Wonderland

Last weekend I went to a frozen lake. It was cold and there was snow on the trees. Luckily I weared warm clothes.

First, I dressed on my skates.

When I finished, I carefully went to the lake. At first it was very difficult because I slipped a lot, but after 30 minutes I was able to walk on the ice. After a bit of training, I managed to make a quick turn.

In the afternoon I was very tired and hungry. I took off my skates and took a big picnic out of my backpack. When I was strengthened, I went home.

It was a very funny and instructive day!

Feedback von Emilie

Does it have clear paragraphs?

Yes, you used clear paragraphs. I can see a clear structure and where a new Paragraph Begins.

What is the topic sentence in each paragraph?

1. Last Weekend I went to a frozen lake.

2. First, I dressed on my skates.

3. When I finished, I carefully went to the lake.

4. In the afternoon I was very tired and hungry

5. It was a very funny and intructive day!

Do you get information about the 5 Ws?

What?: A day in the winter Wonderland

Where?: At a frozen lake.

When?: Last Weekend

Why?: /

Who?: Lena