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Emilie

Ideas: · a walk trough a forest in the mountains with my whole Family · saw very much animals · a guide showed us some intersting trees · heared some birds singing · had a great view from the hills After the walk: · its snowed · make a snowballfight · built a snowman · at the end we drank some tea or cocao and ate some biscuites

A day in a forest

Last weekend my family and I drave to Austria to have a holiday there.

When we arrived we settle in our rooms . Then we went to the breakfast room and ate some delicious things. After that, we went out, because my parnets want to see a famous forest. On hour we had a nice tour with our guide. We saw some intersting birds, which were singing very beautiful.

When we went to a cave we saw some young deer. We also saw foxes, hedgehogs, squirrels and beavers. Very nice!

After the long walk we were on the mountains. From there we had a great view. So we saw our hostel and a famous lake. Suddenly it begans to snow! That was the first time in this year! That‘s why we did a snowballfight with almost. But after that I was building a snowman.

When we went back to the hostel we almost were feeling cold. When we were inside the hostel we drank cocao and cups of tea, while we ate our biscuites.

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1. Last weekend my family and I drave to Austria to have a Holiday there. 2. When we arrived we settle in our rooms. 3. When we went to a cave we saw some young deer. 4. When we went back to the hostel we almost were feeling cold.

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What: A day in forest.

Where: At Austria

When: Last Weekend.

Why: Holiday

Who: Emilie and her family