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Luis

S.38 Nr.2

A very nice film

by Luis Metternich

Two years ago, I went to the cinema with my friend, my sister, my mum, the sister of my friend and the mother of my friend. We went by train and watched the film ,,The Lego Movie’’ in the cinema.

As we reached the cinema, I ordered Nachos and my friend popcorn.

After that, we went into the cinema room. The film was very nice. One Actor was the Lego figure Batman. My favourite figure.

At the end, we went by train again and as we reached at the station we drove to Mc Donalds it was a really nice day.

Feedback by Alex:

Does it have clear paragraphs? Yes, it has. The paragraphs are very clear.

What is the topic sentence in each paragraph? 1.) Two years ago, I went to the Cinema... 2.) As we reached the Cinema... 3.) ...we went into the Cinema room. 4.) At the end, we went by Train and as we reached at the Station we drove to Mc Donalds.

Do you get information about the 5 Ws? When? Two years ago Where? In a Cinema What? They watched a film Who? Luis, his sister, his mum, his friend, the mother of his friend, the sister of his friend Why? Because they wanted to watch a film

Feedback from Endrit:

Does it have clear paragraphs?

The paragraphs are OK. The third paragraph is not as good as the others paragraphs.

What is the topic sentence in each paragraph?

Paragraph 1: Two years ago, I went to the cinema…

Paragraph 2: As we reached the cinema...

Paragraph 3: After that, went into the cinema room.

Paragraph 4: At the end, we went by train again…

Do you get information about the 5 Ws?

Who? Luis, his sister, his mum, his friend, the sister of his friend and the mother of his friend

Why? -

What? went to the cinema

Where? cinema

When? two years ago