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Xenia

My Winter Holidays

I want to talk about my Winter Holidays.

In my Winter Holidays I phoned with my sister Jessi, because she is for one year in Australia. I miss her so much!

I was skate with my little sister Emma, Michelle and Mum, on a rink, we was there because we want to skate with ice skates. My little sister would skate too, but she can not skate. But later she can do it because she learn it.

And I was Swimming with my brother Vali, Valis friend Mike, Mikes Girlfriend Serlina, my little sister Emma and my sister Michelle. In Zikurat in a swimming pool to swim. My little sister Emma must swim with floaties. Then we was slide, and we play with a ball. It was really cool.

One week later, I was with my Mum and my sister Michelle in Cologne Shopping, to buy clothes. We drive there with a train. It was very funny, later we still was in Starbucks and in a Photo-Box.

I really like my Winter Holidays, they was very funny and cool.

Feedback for Xenia

Your text is good, but sometimes you have to check your text.

You use paragraphs, but maybe you haven´t a good beginning.

winter holidays → not Winter Holidays

And I think you mean “ice rink” not “rink”